I don't know what anybody else is thinking, but I'm not saying you suck. Far from it. You're getting some good tones, and you're accurate. You've clearly taken the time to organize it into something repeatable. But, you may have missed your calling. This is the moody, directionless, forgettable, tiring, melody-free stuff that makes for great background music for angsty teenage coming-of-age movies. Listening to this piece, you can just see some marginally attractive 16 year old long-haired brunette wandering along the water's edge trying to justify her undying love for some drug-addled boom-boom who cheats, beats on, and ignores her when she most needs attention. Helps if it's late fall or early winter, when everything is hopelessly stark, cold and gray. But on its own, the piece can't stand. While it would work as part of a soundtrack, it's unlikely to be published that way as it's not something anybody would pay to listen to twice. I suspect most people wouldn't realize they'd even heard it once.
My advice? Move to Hollywood. They'd probably eat this stuff up with a spoon. Plus, there's always porn. They love royalty-free music.