Patrick from Davis said:What mic is this you speak of??? I just got a kit for a ribbon mic and need to put it together.
Patrick
Cagey said:It is kinda hissy. Also, the mix sounds somewhat unbalanced. The background vocals are too far back, IMO. Then, the lead break, while well done and appropriate, is a bit hot.
The line "I've had impure thoughts regarding your chastity" might flow better if you changed "regarding" to "about" to cut down on the syllable count. Sounds a bit rushed/busy.
Similarly, where you say "position clear", there's too much emphasis on the wrong syllables of "position".
All that said, it's an addicting piece. It was caught in my head for hours after I heard it the first time. I've listened to it about 15 times now. I'm sure it's going to be a popular tune once you release it. It's musically good just for starters, but the lyrics hit some base emotional points. Chicks dig emotional points, especially when they prey on their insecurities.
[/quote]Mayfly said:might flow better if you changed "regarding" to "about" to cut down on the syllable count. Sounds a bit rushed/busy.
Mayfly said:Kevin this is really great feedback and it's greatly appreciated. I wish I could get this kind of thing all the time with songs that I write. BTW - did you notice that I ditched the last verse? It was totally lame.
Cagey said:It is kinda hissy. Also, the mix sounds somewhat unbalanced. The background vocals are too far back, IMO. Then, the lead break, while well done and appropriate, is a bit hot.
The line "I've had impure thoughts regarding your chastity" might flow better if you changed "regarding" to "about" to cut down on the syllable count. Sounds a bit rushed/busy.
Similarly, where you say "position clear", there's too much emphasis on the wrong syllables of "position".
All that said, it's an addicting piece. It was caught in my head for hours after I heard it the first time. I've listened to it about 15 times now. I'm sure it's going to be a popular tune once you release it. It's musically good just for starters, but the lyrics hit some base emotional points. Chicks dig emotional points, especially when they prey on their insecurities.
Mayfly said:Oh - and I re-recorded the vocal on that first song with my TLM102 - just to show that the hiss goes away when you turn down the gain
http://www.cornflowerbluemusic.com/BandDownloads/files/MaryJosephSept17Mastered.mp3